tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4989277982487812202.post3832146508123972291..comments2018-02-14T08:41:50.951-08:00Comments on The Feather Fountain: Recession: A Reason for Less Coffee?Jacqueline Yauhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12919412415930371605noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4989277982487812202.post-85042223090967265232008-11-13T14:41:00.000-08:002008-11-13T14:41:00.000-08:00Jacqui, I really enjoyed reading your post! You c...Jacqui, I really enjoyed reading your post! You chose a unique and interesting way to illustrate the profound effects that the market has had on consumerism. I've been kind of wondering what the new McDonald's coffee surge had done to sales at Starbucks. What do you think this shift in consumer spending represents? Is it that people are simply trying to save an extra dollar or so here and there? Or is this a mad scramble to save every last penny? I don't know much about the field of economics, so what I really liked about your post is that you were able to address the economic crisis in a way that was not too bogged down with industry jargon. Additionally, I appreciated that you took time to explore many of the possible ways the outcome you are describing could have been caused and I think this greatly strengthened your argument.<BR/><BR/>In my own writing, I often find it difficult to be conversational with the reader when discussing a topic that they may or may not know about. You did an excellent job of achieving a balance between conversational prose and professionalism through your use of pointed questions. For example, in your intro paragraph, you immediately call the reader to think critically about the issue and form their own opinion before you go on to explain your point of view. This strategy engages the reader from the start. Further, your use of quotations effectively grounds your post in relevant evidence.<BR/><BR/>It was hard for me to find anything to critique! One minor thing I might suggest is tightening up your thesis in the intro so that your position on the issue stands out in a more profound way. As it is written, I was able to decipher your thesis, but I feel you might have eased into it instead of stating it as an arguement by spreading it out over several sentences which blunted its effect a little. Secondly, Starbucks (the brand name) is plural - so using the possessive would be "Starbucks'" instead of "Starbuck's." Its weird I know.<BR/><BR/>Anyway, thanks for yet another great post and I look forward to hearing about your final post next Tuesday!Lauren Fordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08598488317838025853noreply@blogger.com